One of my faves. I liked the ambition, but that the story starts on something as low states as a Netflix dating show. I liked the tease of 'For the viewers (and voters)'line in an early paragraph - I wondered what you meant by (and voters). It's fun to see our current (or near future) world compared to the distant past or future (‘Hi there. I hope you can see my screen,’) being spoken by an ancient god, haha - he's worried about screen sharing.
Avoiding Too Hot to Handle as long as you live is probably not the worst idea. It is proper trash televsion. I accidently watched most of Season 5 after catching 2-3 episodes at a friends house. Truthfully, it was the most entertained I'd been in at least a year. I was electrified. I soon developed feelings for one of the contestants. I then later saw myself naked in the mirror and knew happiness would elude me forever. To justify the horror of that entire ordeal, I wrote this tale. 'What if a normal man was on the show?' was my question. How I define normal probably tells you more about my worldview than the story itself!
I'm going to re-read it with a Winston Churchill voice. I love that, haha. In Australia, we have some classic political figures with huge personalities. There's definitely space for Dererk Fish.
On point 3, yes, I'm glad. I won't say why; I'll save that for the post-analysis post. Enough to say that is something I was working on in this piece.
As for point 4, I'm big on removing abstractions like time, money, etc. I picked this up from the guy who wrote Fight Club. Instead of saying an hour passed, express that passage of time through the actions of the story: the sun setting, the film ending...
Genuinely, thanks for this engaging comment. It means a lot that you took the time.
Surreal. Sublime. Succulent.
So it goes.
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Thanks for reading! And thanks for sharing a quote as a note, that was dope!
Bravo Luke . I enjoyed reading this one . Very colourful imagery
One of my faves. I liked the ambition, but that the story starts on something as low states as a Netflix dating show. I liked the tease of 'For the viewers (and voters)'line in an early paragraph - I wondered what you meant by (and voters). It's fun to see our current (or near future) world compared to the distant past or future (‘Hi there. I hope you can see my screen,’) being spoken by an ancient god, haha - he's worried about screen sharing.
What a great comment! Thanks heaps, Sam.
Avoiding Too Hot to Handle as long as you live is probably not the worst idea. It is proper trash televsion. I accidently watched most of Season 5 after catching 2-3 episodes at a friends house. Truthfully, it was the most entertained I'd been in at least a year. I was electrified. I soon developed feelings for one of the contestants. I then later saw myself naked in the mirror and knew happiness would elude me forever. To justify the horror of that entire ordeal, I wrote this tale. 'What if a normal man was on the show?' was my question. How I define normal probably tells you more about my worldview than the story itself!
I'm going to re-read it with a Winston Churchill voice. I love that, haha. In Australia, we have some classic political figures with huge personalities. There's definitely space for Dererk Fish.
On point 3, yes, I'm glad. I won't say why; I'll save that for the post-analysis post. Enough to say that is something I was working on in this piece.
As for point 4, I'm big on removing abstractions like time, money, etc. I picked this up from the guy who wrote Fight Club. Instead of saying an hour passed, express that passage of time through the actions of the story: the sun setting, the film ending...
Genuinely, thanks for this engaging comment. It means a lot that you took the time.